Coin Song

Along the Pavement,the coin rolls
Along and along
There are the people around
People speaking and laughing,walking on the ground
.
And the coin rolls along.
Some times,it just wait there
Until someone pick it up
And bring it home
When someone throws it away It cries
the tears will make it shine.
And the coin looks all brand new

When I saw it
It was glittering in the dust
I picked it up,and brought it my home

We sat beside the bonfire,we talked about the time and weather
he told me a lot of stories,the people around and beyond
we laughed,and smiled,I diped it into the martini,and he said it was made in 1969,we palyed blackjack and he won all the matches
We laughed,and I say another drink

Suddenly he stopped,watching me
Hey,he said,you want to know the keys?
this side is right,and the other is wrong,thus he told me
I pick it up,threw it into the sky
It rolled and rolled,danced beside me
It even know how to dance on toes.I wondered.
He smiles,and said I was once in the hands of a ballete dancer
this side is right,and the other is wrong
slowly it stopped,and I looked

He said yes she didn’t love you.
He said yes your father is living happily in the heaven,he has plenty martini of 1969’s
He said yes tomorrow is a fine day
He said yes there is somebody missing you
He said yes,and he said no

It was deep into the night
When I asked him another question
He was quiet
I threw it to the sky,but it went away
I said wait but he just smiled

I know now,I know I was blind.
I know now,I know I was blind
I said wait but she just smiled
I said another drink and my father just smiled
I know now,I was just blind.
I drank the martini left
packed all I had and
ready to set off as the dawn back

Along the pavement
The coin rolls
rolled through the river,and the other side of the ridge
some times it just wait there
and listen to the people speaking and laughing
when somebody picked it up, bring it home
it looks happy like a child
and when somebody throws it away he cries
He cries.

            Still


A day borns with the sunrise.A day dies with the sunset.im the only man alive.im the happiest man alive.

From the last spring,i'v been wandering here.
Wandering along the banks,the muddy banks of River of Coldness.Water flew by.wandering as the loneliess rise with sunset

im the only man alive.im the happiest man alive.im prettier when in darkness.im happier when you die in vain.i will sing for the sunset,i will dance over your dirty corpse.

Sunset,Sunrise,a new day borns.Sunset,sunrise,a new days dies.
everything around me is sonic.they fade away too quickly to catch even in sounds.2 seconds,and im your superhero.try to catch me.im sonic.

a thunder Storm.the rain pouring down.forest roaring.
im still wandering.wandering to find.land 1000 miles away.
rain down,rain down
rain drop from a high high place
and run through my clutching hands

still

'still fear of the dark?"
"still?always.stay with me tonight."

            Seven Dusts

My grandpa was an old old gentleman
He wore a pair of old old glasses
In a warm summer’s day,he would just sit in the chair
And have a sweet sweet dream

He taught me a song,a song of dusts
Seven dusts,one was weeping
They asked him why
He said he was dying
They laughed
Dusts don’t die,they told him
But he said
I know I was dying
There was my reflection in the rain
And bang,the dust fell apart
Never came back again
He said
I know I was dying
There was my reflection in the rain

The sunflowers were always there,even when he passed away
I was 11 when I saw him lying in the garden
There was no one around and
It was so beatiful that the sky fell in and rain poured down.
I was just there,watching the rain.

I went to the funeral and saw him smile
I told my parents about the rain and they just smile
and wept
I've grown up now and
I've been sitting in the chair he used to be
Sometimes when I rembered the song I just heard him sing
Singing for dusts and singing for rain

Seven dusts,one was weeping
They asked him why
He said he was dying
They laughed
Dusts don’t die,they told him
But he said
I know I was dying
There was my reflection in the rain
And bang,the dust fell apart
Never came back again.

I know I was dying
There was my reflection in the rain
It was so beatiful that the sky fell in and rain poured down.
I was just there,watching the rain.
I know I was dying
There was my reflection in the rain
It was so beatiful that the sky fell in and rain poured down.
I was just there,watching the rain.

            Eclipse

While the Sun roams along the River bank.Burning me like ashes and burning me to the dust.the Dirty sun over the sky,and in seconds it disappeared.

Eclipse.necromancy,magic,Whatever you like and whatever you say.im roaming here.
they are all dead.the final chapter is over.curtain drew.my finger still warm.A Butcher knife .They are all dead.
No mercy.no turning back.So burn.buring like ashes and burning me to the dust.

it's always a good time to remeber.I will remeber.I will SIng a song.
the song Praising our Little one.he Has the Whold world in his Hands.
He has The Big round World in his HAnds.He has every body in his hands.he has the WInd and Rain in HIs hands.see What a wonderful world In hiS haNDs

A butcher KInfe.A knife born For Slaying.killing one by onE,No mercy.no turning Back.
So buring me Like ashed and buring ME to the dust.
the Butcher Knife shimmers While the Eclipse.
Eclipse.necromancy,magic,whatever you like and whatever you say.it shall never Decay.

                   水平不高,还请高手多指教.

            你这还叫初学?????????
晕
那我就是文盲了
持之以恒,必有所成

                   看上去真的很像U2乐队主唱Bono的填词风格。大家可以拿来对照一下。

            ?不是吧
我没怎么看过U2的词.SONIC YOUTH的音乐和一些黑金属乐队的词给我很大影响.还有4AD.

                   请高手指教一下,哪里有问题,怎么改.我觉得韵律差太多,用词也不好

            用词方面稍微有些欠缺啊，组句方面也需要提高啊。笑
已经很不容易了。
加油吧

            呵呵，的确像歌词。

老实说，英文诗歌的格律是很严格的，如果你一定要遵守这些规则，就去找这方面的书看看吧。如果不想那么死板也可以，自己多读几遍，上口就行。（其实格律也就是为了让诗歌上口，有音乐感）

加油哦~ 就连英语专业的人，也很少有对诗歌特别感兴趣的呀~

                   虽然本人E文水平不高，但您确有N把刷子！！！大家一起切磋一下，也教教我！请问您是什么专业的？

            TO 苏菲娅:555555本来就是想写歌词来的.因为以前看过Tropic Of Cancer,对Miler那种不以韵律为主而节奏分明的写法印象非常深刻.再加上我本人水平真是不高,很多用词都找不到更合适的,韵律就只能求其次了.在次非常想请高手指点一下韵律的问题

其实我个人觉得韵律并不是最重要的..怎么说呢.词语和感觉是最重要的.当然韵律也要有,但它可以是一种贯穿的线索,而不是强求的美感...

我就是英文专业的,2年级请高手多多指教.

                   我也是啊。都是black isle害的。:p