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lich+knight 发表于 2006-1-2 17:18

新的英文诗

&nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  Fall of Aziz<br> &nbsp;  &nbsp; I walk in the edge between light and darkness,<br> &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp; Faith decreases as the sun pass,<br> &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp; Journey still on, but suffer endlessly.<br> &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp; Oh, holy light, where should be my path?<br> &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp; <br> &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp; While I was wandering,<br> &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp; In dark, I heard a summoning,<br> &nbsp;  &nbsp;   “Brother, why are you hesitating?”<br> &nbsp;  &nbsp; <br> &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp; “Every thing I had belongs to me, don’t take it<br> &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  Lucifer, just rest in the pit.”<br>“Just answer me, what could change your stubbornness? Your rescue is I only want&#33;<br><br>“Can’t you see? Innocents are suffering under the mighty one’s name rather than my powers.”<br> Don’t you know? Paradise and heaven are for these blinded mortals but not for us&#33;<br> Hadn’t you realized? These who named as evil were never been punished; they rested and celebrated with me in the darkness. Because we have the eternity, the eternity of the enjoyments&#33; <br><br>“Come, brother, follow me, you shall not wander in this wildness, it is time to go home, to go to new home where you can rested. No more suffer, no more sorrow”<br> &nbsp;  <br>  With the query, I followed him slowly to the home,<br>  Rested in this new home, <br>  And embrace the darkness for eternity&#33;<br> &nbsp; <br> &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp; <br> &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;   When The Light Come At Once<br> &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  <br> &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  When the light come at once,<br> &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  When the songs of heaven sang at once,<br> &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  Holy child come to earth,<br> &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  Let everyone under his bless.<br><br> &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  May the fallen be rescued,<br> &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  May the corruption be purified,<br> &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  May the suffer end,<br> &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  And may the holy light blessed.<br><br> &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  <br> &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp; <br> &nbsp; <br> <br><br>

LAIN85 发表于 2006-1-2 18:31

厉害<br>我什么时候能写英文诗呢

whitney 发表于 2006-1-4 09:47

LZ好厉害！称赞的话不说了，因为不知道怎么说了。<br><br>不过中间那么长的句子LZ是故意的吗？就偶学过的诗都米这么长的（PS：都是20世纪50年代之前的）<br>偶比较喜欢后面那两段<br>When the light come at once,<br>When the songs of heaven sang at once,<br>Holy child come to earth,<br>Let everyone under his bless.<br><br>May the fallen be rescued,<br>May the corruption be purified,<br>May the suffer end,<br>And may the holy light blessed.<br>很有韵律和力度<br><br>不过，是不是因为the holy light blessed，才会不fallen和the suffer end呢？

O Caro 发表于 2006-1-5 13:18

Congratulations mon ami............you finally got some replies (and admirers...*wink*)<br>Very nice structure.........kinda reminds me of La Belle Dame Sans Merci<br>I think this one is the best of all your poems^^<br>However (hehe....expecting this word?).....same suggestion as for the Angel of Music one.....grammar.........<br>Also it would be nice to add &quot;the&quot; before the title.....<br>May His Dark Majesty be with thee. Salut&#33;

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