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lich+knight 发表于 2005-12-10 15:35

My Vampire Poem

[FONT=Arial][SIZE=7][COLOR=red]<br> &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  <br> &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;   <br> &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp; Eternal<br> &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;   Night falls,<br> &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp; Full moon shines,<br> &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp; Howls of wolves,<br> &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp; Under the star lights, <br> &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  <br>Her shining black hairs cascade over my face,<br> &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp; The red lips open just enough to touch my neck,<br> &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;   And taste the blood of mine…<br> &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;   <br> &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  In her eyes, I see the joy of darkness,<br> &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp; In her eyes, I see my pale newborn body. <br> &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;   She helped me to rise…<br> &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;   <br> &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  “My love, my knight, enjoy my gift of the darkness, enjoy the immortality, enjoy, you and I, tonight, embrace me, as you embrace the darkness…” &nbsp;  <br> &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;   It’s still dark,<br> &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;   The starlights shine upon us,<br> &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;   A bless to the eternity.  <br> &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp;  &nbsp; <br>__________________________________________________________________<br><br> &nbsp; <br> &nbsp;  &nbsp; <br><br>

hulu-hulu 发表于 2005-12-11 20:59

有必要用英语写诗吗？说实话，看得懂，但看不出精妙之处，毕竟对外语诗歌没有什么概念。楼主对外语诗歌很有研究吗？

O Caro 发表于 2005-12-15 09:42

This one&#39;s much better than The Symphony of Doom. ^^<br>Cool poem......ur English skill&#39;s getting better <!--emo&:rolleyes:--><img src='http://www.cndkc.net/bbs_en/html/emoticons/rolleyes.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='rolleyes.gif' /><!--endemo--> <br>hehehe....................<br>1st stanza is sensory details.......but a little weird and kinda off-topic<br>btw......I use English &#39;cause my Chinese input software SUX......

O Caro 发表于 2005-12-29 16:12

Oops......<br>Notice the last sentence in the 3rd stanza<br>&quot;she &#39;helped&#39; me.....&quot;<br>but everything else&#39;s in present tense.....^^&quot;&quot;<br>I know I&#39;m too picky.....but.....welll.....whatever....^^&quot;&quot;&quot;&quot;&quot;&quot; <!--emo&:P--><img src='http://www.cndkc.net/bbs_en/html/emoticons/tongue.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='tongue.gif' /><!--endemo-->

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